IuvIy : Okay, so this sounds like an amazing story. I'd definitely read it! This doesn't really have anything wrong with it, I'd just say to replace some of your simple words with more complex words that mean the same thing to give your story more depth, if you know what I mean. And when you say, “We stopped to meet our tour guide, Joanna. Joanna was a really enthusiastic human,” you should replace the second Joanna with she, so that there won't be any repetition. But overall, great! I'll leave my link in the studio.
xo,
IuvIy <3
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